托福写作解析（二）

二、托福写作解析:An important skill

　　托福写作题目：

　　Topic：An important skill

　　What is a very important skill a person should learn in order to be successful in the world today? Choose one skill and use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.

　　参考范文：

　　计算机技能是最重要的：

　　(1)计算机是工作中必须的。不会计算机软件的话，无法进行工作和学习。

　　(2)计算机已经成为人们互相交流的重要方面，如电子邮件等等。

　　(3)计算机技能能够大量的节省时间。一个成功的人必须把精力抽出来放在最重要的事情上。

　　Success has been an issue broadly discussed and defined by different approaches. Some say that being successful means being wealthy. Others associate success with popularity and power. A third approach would relate success with social and emotional well-being. So we come to the questions: “When can be someone considered successful?” and “What skills make success easier to achieve?"

　　In order to answer the second question, we should have a point of view about what success is. I consider that someone is really successful when that person is able to handle and enjoy social relationships. A leader can be powerful and recognized, but if he is unable to enjoy his leadership and feels lonely because he cannot establish a deep friendship, can we really say such leader is successful? On the other hand, a wealthy person may have all the possessions money can buy, but again, what if he cannot manage a marriage or a friendship? This person is likely to feel lonely and unsatisfied.

　　Developing social abilities may be a very helpful skill for a person to learn, in order to be successful in the social emotional side of his or her life. One ability to develop could be effective and assertive communication. Many misunderstandings and conflicts can be prevented if we express our ideas clearly and respectfully, and if we learn to ask for clarification when we feel threatened or offended by something someone told us. Another ability could be learning to handle teamwork. We need to learn to work with others at work, at home, at school, in our community. Getting into an agreement with our parents, children, coworkers and friends is a situation that can become hard to handle sometimes. Dealing with teamwork can be really helpful. Finally we could add the ability to deal with conflicts with others and conflicts with our own wishes or decisions. We will always find obstacles in our paths; it can be quite useful to know how to overcome them.

　　In my opinion, I would define success as being able to enjoy what you have, what you do and who you deal with everyday. And to achieve success, you should have skills that help you handle relationships with your peers. We are social creatures; we need each other to succeed, and to enjoy our success.

三、托福写作解析:Dangerous sport

　　托福写作题目：

　　Topic：Dangerous sport

　　Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

　　参考分析：罗列出三个理由，比如：金钱、快乐、无知

　　参考范文：

　　人们喜欢危险运动的原因在于：

　　(1)现在的生活压力很大，生活枯燥，危险运动能够放松自己，给自己一些刺激。

　　(2)危险运动能够带来巨大的金钱收益。

　　(3)危险运动能够展示自己。

　　Have you experienced the fear of bungee jumping? Have you ever enjoyed the excitement of car racing? Nowadays, more and more people are attracted to such dangerous activities, especially the young people. Wondering why? After thinking about the lifestyle of those people, the reason goes as follows.

　　While the world is becoming more and more competitive, the tasks on each person's shoulders become heavier and heavier. People's everyday activities are very intense. The best way to relax and get relieved is to go in for dangerous activities, because while you are doing something dangerous, you have to concentrate on it, and you cannot think about anything else. Hence you relieved all the unhappiness and the troubles you had in the daily work.

　　In addition, to take risks and try out new things is one of human being's basic instincts. People always like to do something new, especially when something is popular as well. According to some statistics, the dangerous activities are becoming extremely popular among young people. If you do not try some dangerous activities, people will think that you are a coward and you are afraid of doing it. So it is reasonable enough for them to do dangerous sports to show their braveness.

　　However, I do not like dangerous activities and I believe the phenomenon that people are attracted to dangerous activities is just a whim. After realizing countless disadvantages of them, people will reconsider about them. Some safer activities to help people to get relieved will be developed afterwards.

四、托福写作解析:Arts or environment

　　Topic：Arts or environment?

　　A company is going to give some money either to support the arts or to protect the environment. Which do you think the company should choose? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

　　参考分析：

　　选择哪一个都可以。只要列举出两三个sound reasons。并且要在作文中提及另外一个选择的好处，以显示“考虑周全”。

　　需要考虑的至少有两点：

　　企业花钱，当然要考虑input-output ratio。投入哪一个活动中，公众效应更加明显?

　　社会作为受体，哪一个活动将对社会有更多的实际好处?

　　参考范文：

　　将钱投入在保护环境上

　　(1)保护环境，有利于人民的健康

　　(2)保护环境，能够更好地促进商业发展。

　　(3)公司将钱投入到环境上，能够提高自己的名声，更好的获得利益

　　Frankly speaking, both arts and environment are important to human being. However, if I were the CEO of a company, I would rather give the money to protect the environment than to support the arts. Because environment protection is quite urgent and matters the future of our globe, while arts is a continuous process to improve the quality of life.

　　First of all, environment protection is very urgent. Global warming is becoming more and more serious. Many spices are dying, the ice in South Pole is melting, and many rivers are being contaminated. Now it is time for us to do something to save our earth and our own future.

　　Secondly, environment protection is very important for all, including human being, plants, animals and the Earth. When I was a little boy, I often played in the river that is located beside my village. The water was so clean that we could just drink it directly. There were also many kinds of fishes in the river. It was such a beautiful place that I often played for a whole day. Now things are totally different, the water became brown in color due to pollution from factories, very few fishes can live there. Those small children can never enjoy the fun that I once did.

　　Thirdly, the art is a continuous process to improve the quality of life, which is not as urgent as environment protection. In addition, there are many ways by which funds can be raised for arts, such as exhibitions and auctions of artistic works. Environment protection needs money more urgently than arts do.

　　Although both arts and the environment are important, I prefer to give the money to support environment protection, due to the three reasons mentioned above.