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　　Adulthood will be a brand new chapter for children, from which only their independence and contribution to the society can help them survive. How to get children prepared for adult life is of particular importance in this competitive world. I believe encouraging children to take part-time jobs is a good way to get ready.

　　积累经验，这些经验若果我们以后从事相关的工作的话，会非常有用。但是如果我们在正式工作之前，从来没有过任何兼职工作经历，那么工作的时候会发现自己的能力并不能胜任工作

　　Taking part-timejobs can help children accumulate experience, which will prove useful if we are employed in a related field. On the other hand, if we have never taken any part-time jobs, we will find ourselves incompetent at our real jobs in the future.For instance, working in a team, a child can have a better understanding of cooperation; being required to do presentations, he/she will have to overcome his fear and shyness of speaking in public; when he/she has been treated unfairly, he/she will try to figure out a way to defend himself/herself or learns to accept it. The accumulation of skills and experience will pave the way of his/her future adult life.

　　做了兼职工作会知道赚钱的真相。因为在工作之后会发现，我们只有勤劳地完成任务、坚持和有强烈的责任心，才能拿到薪水。这样青少年就知道赚钱不易，他们才能更成熟。而如果孩子们只是从父母那里要钱的话，永远不会觉得赚钱辛苦。

　　Children will be aware of the reality of making money. To be more concise/ To put it another way, it takes diligence, persistence, a strong sense of responsibility to get payment. Only when they know how hard it is to make money can students be brought closer to maturity. However, if all they do is to ask money from their parents, they will never really grow up. Take my nephew, Jerry, as an example. Being the only child in his family, his parents and his grandparents give him enough pocket money every month, so he doesn’t have to have any sense of financial management. He would squander $1000 on a pair of shoes without a blink of an eye and throw them away one week later.However, things got changed last summer when he made a bet with his parents to be a guide at Beijing. He had to wake up at 6 every weekend to pick up clients and drive them all across this city to see tourist attractions. He had to take pictures for them, order food in ahead, and running around to get whatever his clients needed. This experience gave him a better understanding of how hard it is to get money.

　　也可以从Budget或者Buy present for his parents等方面再说一阵，能叨叨的还是挺多的。

　　Some people may consider that there are disadvantages taking part-time jobs, for example,children may get acquaintance with people who may have bad influence on them.Well, I do admit that there are chances that children work with or work for people like this. But I don’t think this should be a reason holding children back from taking part-time jobs. As long as parents keep track of their children’s updates, they can keep the youngsters on the right track. Plus, to meet different people in an early age is not necessarily a bad thing. Meeting people from all walks of life, children will realize the variety of opinions,diversity of personality, and the choices of lifestyles one may have. Their horizon will be broadened-burying themselves in books and dry theory is not the only thing that they can do in their life. After all, I still believe encouraging children to take part-time job is a good idea.

　　说的很明白了，孩子们，该干活啦！

　　My idea is thusquite clear: children should take part-time jobs for accumulation of experienceand better understanding of money. Also, the disadvantage of part-time jobs canbe easily prevented.

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