明明托福单词和模板都背了 独立写作分数就是上不去（三）

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　　而一个好例子不仅需要有效地论证自己的观点，还需要包含具体细节(如how to design game-based English speaking classes,how to create video flashcards, and how to teach grammar for communication purpose)

　　加入了合理的因果解释和具体的例子细节支撑后，一个发展清晰的中间段就形成了：

　　College education is good for our future career, because in college we will know some fundamental theories, advanced technology, and recent discoveries which can help us solve real-world problems in the workplace. For example, my high school English teacher, who majored in Applied English Linguistics at Beijing University, learned how to design game-based English speaking classes, how to create video flashcards, and how to teach grammar for communication purpose. Thus, by applying what he learned in class, he succeeded in kindling students’ passion for learning English and improving their proficiency in English speaking. Thus, receiving high quality college education lays a solid foundation for students’ future work by equipping them with necessary knowledge and skills.

　　现在，我们来看一个20分学生的写作片段：

　　To begin with, going to college is good for students’ future. It is evident that students can find a decent job, if they have been to college. Besides, no one can deny that people who do not get the bachelor’s degree will eventually be eliminated by the society. For example, recent researches by a couple of prestigious institutions have also repeatedly demonstrated that most of students who graduate from college will succeed in the future.

　　这个片段的语言没有硬伤，也符合基本发展结构(Point-explanation-example)，但是他在explanation部分并没有对前文做出真正的因果解释，而是只是换种说法重复前文内容;在example环节，他尝试用调查研究来做例子，但却没有提供关于研究过程和内容的任何细节，自然也无法说服读者。

　　因此，本段能够体现出作者具有一定的语言基础，但却绝对不是一个合格的论证段落，这个学生也因此止步在fair档。

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