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雅思写作语料库:父母角色差异的原因及未来作用

2016-08-09 14:16

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作者:上海新东方

In some countries,the role of a mother differs in some ways from the role of a father. Why do you think these differences exist? How might parental roles develop in the future? 在一些国家,父母在教育孩子中扮演的角色,和很多方面,是不同的,为何存在这种差异,在未来父母的角色会有哪些变化?

【薛鹏点评】

新题出现,恒热教育,谈及父母对于孩子成长中影响差异的原因,展望父母在孩子未来成长中作用的不同,不属分析问题解决问题话题,考察头脑风暴,写作有一定难度。

小鹏哥预测题目中的寒门贵子还是将门虎子,是否所有的父母都应该学习育儿课程,和本场考试都有交集。

【思路拓展】

男性比较理性和阳刚,女性比较感性和温柔,因此,他们对于孩子成长的影响自然不同,一般而言,孩子会从爸爸身上学到坚毅和勇敢,会从妈妈身上学会善良和孝道。骨血相连,血浓于水,无论父母,对于孩子的教育和引导都是积极的善意的。爸爸努力赚钱,是为孩子赢一个成长环境,妈妈努力育儿,是让孩子明辨是非、行为规范。

教育这个词的本源是说将一个人从一种蒙昧的无知的状态中引导出来,教育应该涉及道德教育、性格培养、学术教育等。小鹏哥已为人父,我以教会笑笑坚强、独立、自信为己任。小石头已为人母,她以教会笑笑善良、孝心、守则为己任。

教育不能颠覆:道德教育和性格培养应该优先于学术成长,先重品质和品行,后重成绩和选择。如果可以畅想未来,父爱如山,为人父,应该树立标杆,让孩子学会志存高远,不懈奋斗。母爱如水,为人母,应该树立标杆,让孩子学会海纳百川,清澈纯净。

2015年11月21日雅思写作A卷回忆(小鹏哥版)

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【范文赏析】

【首段】 背景介绍 + 写作目的

Parents are the initial teachers of their children, thereby, their speeches and behaviors, to a larger extent, exert a subtle influence on children’s character-training and future development. The impacts that parents impose on their kids might differ greatly due to various reasons. This essay aims to explore where the differences lie in and how parental roles will change in the future.

【解析】

1. Their speeches and behaviors, to a larger extent, exert a subtle influence on children’s character-training and future development. 父母的言行举止,在很大程度上,对于孩子的性格培养和未来发展有潜移默化的影响。

2. This essay aims to explore where the differences lie in and how parental roles will change in the future. 本文目的在于探究这些差异所在,再探究下父母的角色在未来会如何变化。

【二段】父母对于孩子影响差异的原因展开

Due to the gender differences,parental roles vary greatly in a child’s growth. Males tend to more rational and tenacious, while females tend to be more tender and sensible, in this sense, a child can benefit differently from the parent. As a father, I always try my utmost to set a fine learning example for my child, what my kid can acquire from me is to be big at heart, cherish great ambition and rely on honest hard work to strike for those cherish-but-failed dreams. By contrast, seen from the role my wife plays, it is her unshakable obligation to guide our child to unite peers, respect the old, make a clear distinction between right and wrong. In addition,the distinct workload and pressure might account for the difference. Fathers, in most cases, have to stand out in career, hence, they usually allocate less to educating children, by contrast, mothers generally give priority to their families, thus, they will spend more time accompanying their children.

【解析】

1. Male tend to more rational and tenacious, while female tend to be more tender and sensible. 男性更加理性和坚韧,然而,女性更加温柔和感性。

2. What my kid can acquire from me is to be big at heart, cherish great ambition and rely on honest hard work to strike for those cherish-but-failed dreams. 孩子从父亲身上学到心胸宽广、胸怀大志、为梦想不懈奋斗。

3. Seen from the role my wife plays, it is her unshakable obligation to guide our child to unite peers, respect the old, make a clear distinction between right and wrong. 从妈妈扮演的角色来看,她的责任所在是教育孩子团结他人,尊敬长辈、明辨是非。

4. Fathers, in most cases, have to stand out in career, therefore, they usually allocate less to educating children. 多数情况下,父亲要建功立业,因此,他们教育孩子的时间较少。

5. Mothers generally give priority to their families, thus, they will spend more time accompanying their children. 母亲通常更加重视家庭,因此,她们陪伴孩子的时间较多。

【三段】父母对于孩子不同影响的未来展望

Virtually,it is no easy task to simply predict the changes the parental roles in the future,for different families might have manifold conditions. One possible change might be that more professional mothers will appear when their families has accumulated enough family wealth. More precisely, more females are willing to return to families and wholeheartedly take care of their children. Another predictable development I can figure out is that parents will make joint efforts in educating and guiding their children no matter how busy they are because numerous parents might take fostering excellent children as their source of happiness and spiritual contentment.

【解析】

1. Virtually,it is no easy task to simply predict the changes the parental roles in the future 实际上,简单预测未来父母作用的变化绝非易事。

2. More females are willing to return to families and wholeheartedly take care of their children. 更多的女性会愿意回归家庭,悉心照料孩子。

3. Numerous parents might take fostering excellent children as their source of happiness and spiritual contentment. 很多父母会把培养优秀的孩子当做是幸福的源泉和精神的满足。

【尾段】总结立场

In closing,parenting will always have many indispensable roles to play in shaping children’s character, establishing their life outlook and influencing their destinies. My firm stand is that all parents will take efforts and take time to influence their children positively. After all, blood is thick than water.

【解析】

1. Parenting will have many indispensable roles to play in shaping children’s character, establishing their life outlook and influencing their destinies. 父母在孩子们的性格培养,人生观树立,命运走向方面可以发挥不可替代的作用。

2. After all, blood is thick than water. 毕竟,血浓于水。

【全文点评】

本篇有感而发,自由写作,一气呵成。最后一句血浓于水,余音绕梁,可谓言有尽而意无穷,相信只有感动自己的文章才能引发读者共鸣。当作者没有博取高分的期待,当作者忠实于自我的感情,当作者只是想做一次真诚的交流的时候,可能,你也就在字里行间展示了你真实的水平。

  本文严格按照题目指令写作,符合雅思写作四项评分标准。主题明确、行文通畅、逻辑清晰、论据饱满、文风朴素,偶以亮点词汇为点缀,可为雅思考生赏析之佳作。

作者介绍

薛鹏

薛鹏(@雅思小鹏哥),新东方网专栏作家,高中时代出版诗文集《选择坚强》,每年创作20万字原创语料库以及范文。吉林大学外国语言学及应用语言学硕士。17年英语教学经验 (7年新东方雅思托福SAT教学经历),前长春新东方功勋教师,多次培训出雅思和托福高分学员(雅思写作8.0分,托福写作29分)。

爱生活,爱运动,爱音乐电影,爱旅行美食,爱读书摄影,更爱英语教学。20岁登上英语讲台,主讲英语万词速记课程。熟悉GRE、TOEFL、SAT、TEM、CET等各级别词汇教学。

大一时即在报刊杂志上主持“英语学习系列谈”以及“薛鹏教你学单词”等专栏。2006年获得“外研社/朗文杯”新概念背诵大赛吉林省赛区大学成人组冠军,全国总决赛大学成人组二等奖。

对于各类写作课程有精深研究,授课方式行云流水,妙语连珠,知识底蕴深厚,对学员极具有启迪性和激励性。

教学理念:Education is not the filling of a pail but the lighting of a fire.(教育不是注满一桶水,而是点燃一把火)

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