雅思写作语料库：是否同意老师的影响比父母大

For schoolchildren, their teachers have more influence on their intelligence and social development than their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 是否同意在孩子们的智力和社交方面，老师的影响比父母大?

【薛鹏点评】恒热教育，原题重现。

【雅思题库】

Once children start school, teachers have more influence on their intellectual and social development than parents do. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 孩子们上学后，在学习能力和社交能力的发展方面，老师比父母的影响更大，你在多大程度上同意这个观点?(2008年9月6日雅思题目)

【薛鹏点评】语意升格

【头脑风暴导言】

父母是孩子们的启蒙教师，孩子们是父母们的一面镜子。因为是骨血，所以，父母们本能之爱在孩子们的知识拓展和社交技能方面影响颇深。然而，一旦幼童开始步入课堂，尤其是开始接受中小学教育之后，教育者在他们的学业、社交、人生观等方面的影响也许更加显著。

【作家立场】比之父母，老师对于孩子的智力开发和社交培养影响更加深刻，但是，我们不能忽视父母们在孩子们成长中的作用。

【思路拓展】

① 为何老师对于孩子们的智力开发和社交技能的培养影响深刻：

1. 确实，老师有助于孩子们的智力开发及学业的优异，因为老师们通常精通专业知识，了解教育常识，可以总结学科精华，因此，老师们的教育更加高效。同时，一个学生大部分时间是呆在学校里，因此，老师的教育会对学生的学业有潜移默化的影响。

2. 另外，老师在培养孩子的社交技能方面也可以发挥重要的作用，教育孩子们如何以正确的方式和周围的同学交往及交流，鼓励孩子们扩大交友圈，是老师们的职责所在。

②为何父母对于孩子们的智力开发和社交技能的培养亦有影响：

1. 父母也可以影响孩子们的智力成长，有些父母本身就是优秀的教师，其专业优势可以在一定特定的领域让孩子成长更快。

2. 父母也可以影响孩子们的社交技能。常言道：父母是最好的老师，父母是孩子们的第一个老师，因此是孩子们效仿的对象，父母的言行举止对于孩子如何与人交往是起到了潜移默化的影响。同时，因为父母本能地爱孩子，所以会有意识地教育孩子行为处事。在处理人际关系方面，多数父母会教育孩子们尊敬长辈，团结同龄人等。因此，不能忽视父母对于孩子成长的影响。

【总结立场】

我认为，父母和老师对于孩子的发展都有深远的影响。比之父母，老师对于孩子的智力和社交能力的培养具有更加深刻的影响，尤其是当孩子们开始接受中小学教育之后。

（小鹏哥摄影作品）

【范文赏析】

【首段】 背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场

Numerous people will exert a profound impact on one’s character-training，mental growth and future life. Parents are our initial teachers, yet, educators will also be playing an increasingly crucial role in one’s academic study and social life. An opinion springs up that teachers impose a far more significant influence on one’s study and social development compared with parents. Basically, I side with the standpoint，however，the impact of parents can never be ignored.

【解析】

1. Parents are our initial teachers 父母是我们最初的老师。

2. An opinion springs up that …… 有人认为……

3. impose a far more significant influence on …… 有更加深远的影响

【二段】 支持原题观点

Granted, some convincing arguments could be easily explored to justify that teachers exert a noticeable effect on those who are in the formative years in terms of social skills and intelligence development. For a start, as for students, since the majority of their time is spent in the classroom, thereby, teachers will exert a subtle influence on their cultivation of study habits or learning methods. Further，teachers usually excel in professional knowledge，summarize the core of knowledge and have deeper insight into the common sense of education，thus，they can help students excel academically

Last, it is the obligation of educators to guide students how to communicate and associate with peers in a proper way. More precisely, one’s commutation skills could be fostered and one’s suitable social ability could be developed with the assistance and guidance of teachers.

【解析】

1. exert a noticeable effect on…… v对于……有显著的影响

2. those who are in the formative years n 成长中的年轻人

3. exert a subtle influence on their cultivation of study habits or learning methods v对于他们学习习惯和方法的培养有潜移默化的影响

4. help students excel academically v帮助学生们精通学业

5. it is the obligation of educators to …… v 做……是教育者职责所在

【二段】 让步原题观点的局限性

Nonetheless，it is rather groundless simply believe that parents have no roles to play in children’s sociability and academic performance. First，parents, in most cases, know better about their children and are instinctively willing to devote their love to the development of their children. In this sense, some talented or knowledgeable parents could successfully help children achieve more in academic study. Also， almost every parent will educate their child to respect the old and unite the peers. In light of this statement，parents impose a marked effect on their children’s social development.

【解析】

1. Nonetheless，it is rather groundless simply believe that …… 然而，简单认为……是相当肤浅的

2. in light of this statement v基于这样的说法

3. impose a marked effect on …… v对于……施加显著的影响

【尾段】 再次亮明观点

In a nutshell，my view is that under no circumstances can we ignore the indispensable roles parents could play in their children’s development. Virtually, both teachers and educators exert profound influence on one’s intelligence and social kills. However, once schooling starts, teachers will have more influence.

【解析】

However, once schooling starts, teachers will have more influence. 一旦开始接受中小学教育，老师的影响更加显著。

【全文点评】

本篇为多年之前的旧文，现精细修改之后和童鞋分享。小鹏哥像鸟儿爱护自己的羽毛一样爱惜着自己的每篇文本。惜墨如金，字斟句酌，仅希望每一次的分享都可以给读者带来一点快乐、启迪和收获。

【小鹏哥语料库】

1. exert a noticeable effect on ……v有显著的影响

2. impose a marked effect on …… v有显著的影响

3. exert a subtle influence on v对于……施加了潜移默化的影响

4. respect the old v尊敬老人

5. unite the peers v 团结同龄人

6. campus activities n校园活动

7. it is certainly true that = a hard truth is that …… 这是事实

8. communication skills，group awareness and co-operation ability n交流技能，团体意识及合作能力

9. make it easy for him or her to get along with others when he or she grows up. 使他在长大的时候很容易和人交往

10. parents are generally most concerned about the growth of their children 父母通常更加关注孩子们的成长。

11. Most children tend to unconsciously imitate everything. 多数孩子们会无意识地模仿父母。

12. Most parts of children education are virtually beyond parents’ reaches. 孩子的学习父母们无法教授。

13. Most of teachers are usually adept at professional knowledge 大多数老师精通专业知识。

【解析】 are usually adept at = excel in = be good at v熟练于，精通于……

14. have deeper insight into the common sense of education v了解教育的常识

15. summarize the core of knowledge v总结学科的精华

16. …… exert a far more profound influence on students’ academic study v对于学生的学习影响更深

17. Parents, in most cases, know better about their children and are instinctively willing to devote their love to the development of their children. 父母最了解孩子，本能地最爱孩子。

【解析】instinctively adv本能地

18. how to associate and communicate with peers in a proper way v如何和同龄人以恰当的方式交往和交流

19. Students’ social skills could also be greatly affected by those teachers because they take them as role models 学生们的社交技能会受到老师的影响，因为孩子们拿老师当成偶像。

20. Both teachers and educators exert profound influence on one’s intelligence and social kills. 父母和老师对于孩子的发展都有深远的影响。

作者介绍： 

薛鹏(@雅思小鹏哥)，新东方网专栏作家，高中时代出版诗文集《选择坚强》，每年创作20万字原创语料库以及范文。吉林大学外国语言学及应用语言学硕士。17年英语教学经验 (7年新东方雅思托福SAT教学经历)，前长春新东方功勋教师，多次培训出雅思和托福高分学员(雅思写作8.0分，托福写作29分)。

爱生活，爱运动，爱音乐电影，爱旅行美食，爱读书摄影，更爱英语教学。20岁登上英语讲台，主讲英语万词速记课程。熟悉GRE、TOEFL、SAT、TEM、CET等各级别词汇教学。

大一时即在报刊杂志上主持“英语学习系列谈”以及“薛鹏教你学单词”等专栏。2006年获得“外研社/朗文杯”新概念背诵大赛吉林省赛区大学成人组冠军，全国总决赛大学成人组二等奖。

对于各类写作课程有精深研究，授课方式行云流水，妙语连珠，知识底蕴深厚，对学员极具有启迪性和激励性。

教学理念：Education is not the filling of a pail but the lighting of a fire.(教育不是注满一桶水，而是点燃一把火)

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