雅思写作语料库：竞技体育是否最益于团队精神

Some people argue that schools should only offer subjects that are beneficial to students’ future careers. Other subjects, such as music and sports, are not important. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 有人认为：学校应该给孩子们提供便于就业的课程，其他课程，例如音乐课和体育课，不重要，是否同意这个观点。

【布局图】

首段：背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场

二段：让步原题观点的合理性

三段：反驳原题观点之不合理

尾段：再次亮明观点

写作类型：反对唯一性和最佳性

【作家立场】

鼓励孩子们从事竞技体育活动是培养他们合作精神和群体性经验的有效策略之一，但是，这不是最佳的、唯一的方式。

【范文赏析】

【首段】背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场

Growth education is one of the key words of a person’s development. People have been debating, for many years, whether the best approach to enhance children’s cooperative consciousness is through encouraging them to embark on sports-related activities at school without reaching any definite consensus. To voice my opinion, inspiring students to dive into sports events is one of the effective strategies to help them cultivate cooperation spirit and group experience, yet, it is not the best and only way.

【解析】

1. Growth education is one of the key words of a person’s development 成长教育者个人的发展中至关重要。

2. embark on sports-related activities v从事和体育相关的活动

3. Inspiring students to dive into sports events is one of the effective strategies to help them cultivate cooperation spirit and group experience. 鼓励孩子们从事竞技体育活动是培养他们的合作精神和群体性经验的有效策略之一。

【二段】让步原题观点之合理性

Indeed, I have to concede that those who argue that sports activities can help young adults to nurture teamwork spirit and raise their awareness of cooperation are, to some extent, never without their reasons. Some people might argue that sports events can assist students in learning how to communicate and associate with people around them and thus improve their cooperation. To illustrate, in a basketball team, team member has to learn to tolerate and unite others, they must work together as a team and stick together as friends to win the victory. In this sense, campus activities can cultivate one’s cooperation spirit.

【解析】

1. nurture teamwork spirit and raise their awareness of cooperation 培养团队精神和合作意识

2. how to communicate and associate with people around them 学习如何与人交往交流

3. they must work together as a team and stick together as friends to win the victory. 他们必须团结一致，相交如友，才能取得胜利。

【三段】反驳其不合理性：

Nevertheless，as for how to develop one’s teamwork sprit, there are still a great many other options available. First, it works for students to partake of group learning. For example，I once participated in a study group，we have to make joint efforts to finish the professor’s assignments. Each team member has to learn how to coordinate and work with others. Sometimes, one has to sacrifice his or her advantage to help the team stand out. Also, efforts could be made by parents to send children to summer or winter holiday camping, which is also an ideal way to strengthen students’ group consciousness and interpersonal skills. Eventually, it is duty of every individual to learn to be big heart and put himself or herself in others’ shoes and thus people can live in harmony with other peers.

【解析】

1. It works for students to partake of group learning 学生们参加小组学习也是起作用的。

2. make joint efforts to finish make joint efforts to finish the professor’s assignments v共同努力完成老师的任务

3. coordinate and work with others v与他人协调与合作

4. has to sacrifice his or her advantage to help the team stand out 牺牲自我优势，以帮助团队胜出

5. to learn to be big heart and put himself or herself in others’ shoes 学会心胸豁达，换位思考

6. people can live in harmony with other peers v可以与其他同龄人和谐共处

【尾段】再次亮明观点+(总结理由)

In the final analysis, I would like to re-affirm my conviction that in addition to motivating students to participate in sports activities, there are still other ways available to make one become socially adequate and cooperative.

【解析】make one become socially adequate 使人在社交方面得心应手，善于合作。

【全文点评】

本篇采取让步反驳写法，承认原题观点之合理性，反驳其局限性，为雅思常见写作思路之一种。本文主题明确、布局清晰、例证饱满、词汇丰富、文风朴素。可为考生研读之佳作。

作者介绍：

薛鹏(@雅思小鹏哥)，新东方网专栏作家，高中时代出版诗文集《选择坚强》，每年创作20万字原创语料库以及范文。吉林大学外国语言学及应用语言学硕士。17年英语教学经验 (7年新东方雅思托福SAT教学经历)，前长春新东方功勋教师，多次培训出雅思和托福高分学员(雅思写作8.0分，托福写作29分)。

爱生活，爱运动，爱音乐电影，爱旅行美食，爱读书摄影，更爱英语教学。20岁登上英语讲台，主讲英语万词速记课程。熟悉GRE、TOEFL、SAT、TEM、CET等各级别词汇教学。

大一时即在报刊杂志上主持“英语学习系列谈”以及“薛鹏教你学单词”等专栏。2006年获得“外研社/朗文杯”新概念背诵大赛吉林省赛区大学成人组冠军，全国总决赛大学成人组二等奖。

对于各类写作课程有精深研究，授课方式行云流水，妙语连珠，知识底蕴深厚，对学员极具有启迪性和激励性。

教学理念：Education is not the filling of a pail but the lighting of a fire.(教育不是注满一桶水，而是点燃一把火)

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