【雅思写作】雅思大作文（2）

【范文赏析】：

{首段}：背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场

Health is to every individual what perfume is to flowers. However, people have been pondering, for many years, the significance of maintaining personal health without reaching any definite consensus. A popular belief is that personal health only serves the good of the community. As I see it，optimizing personal health could not only benefit the society，but importantly，conduce to individual life, family harmony and career prosperity.

【解析】：

1. Health is to every individual what perfume is to flowers. 健康对于每个人，如同花香对于花朵。

2. a popular belief is that ……一种流行的观点就是……

3. optimizing personal health v 完善个人健康

4. conduce to individual life, family harmony and career prosperity v有助于个人生活，家庭和睦，事业辉煌

{二段}：为何保持健康是尽到了社会责任

Indeed, I have to concede that keeping fit could be of great benefits for a nation and therefore be deemed as the personal obligation to the community. In other words, As for the country，the increased proportion of wholesome citizens could greatly diminish the consumption in terms of the public medical treatment. Also, health indicates good mentality and vigorous physique. It is conceivable that the increase of healthy social citizens can help create immense social value and thus inject new vitality into the further prosperity of a nation.

【解析】：

1. could be of great benefits for a nation v对于国家有利好

2. The increased proportion of wholesome citizens could greatly diminish the consumption in terms of the public medical treatment. 健康公民的增加会减少社会公共医疗的消耗。

3. Health indicates good mentality and vigorous physique. 健康意味着健良好的心态和充沛的体能。

4. create immense social value and thus inject new vitality into the further development of a nation v 创造巨大的价值，为国家的发展注入新鲜活力。