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【新东方雅思写作】让你的雅思作文提高1.5分的10个例子

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关于英语写作,首先一个观点需要明确:写作的目的是为了表达出你脑子里对于某件事物的观点。有时候我们所谓的学术写作会让人感觉有点老派而陈旧。不过被保留下传统的总是有它的道理,学术写作能锻炼我们的严谨的句型运用能力。通过这些训练,你就能轻松掌握商务邮件的写作艺术,书写排版,商业计划,官方文书这些实际性很强的书面技能自然也不在话下。

这篇文章你会收获

1.句子结构中需要避免的常见的错误;

2.你值得遵循的经典句型框架;

3.10种适用于各种主题的,模版句型。

首先让我们来聊聊句型

错误一:破句

“破句”是学术写作中最常见的一个结症, 很多人写作会“漏掉”主语,这样的文章会让你想表达的信息无法通过你的文字被准确传达,让读者一头雾水。要解决这个顽症,你需要将这些片段放入一个完整的句子中,并给予明确的主语。

错误示范:Difficult to research the matter.

正确示范:Scholars find it difficult to research the matter.

错误二: 主语不一致

意味着一个句子里有超过1个的主语,这样会大大削弱你文章的精准度。造成这个错误的主要原因是缺乏恰当的连接词和标点服务号,这样让读者很难找到你的句子逻辑,读起来一头雾水。要解决这个问题,最简单的方法就是将其断开,或者用准确的连词将主语分开来写。

错误示范:Scientists find it difficult to research the matter since there are too few case studies to rely on.

正确示范:Scientists find it difficult to research the matter. There are too few case studies to rely on.

句子太长

句子太长或者太复杂会让你的文章变得晦涩难懂。把自己的思考用清晰的逻辑结构表达出来很重要。 要保证让每个人读懂并且体会到句子中的细节。 我们要努力让每一句句子都清晰干净,避免句子看上去过于冗长。

错误示范:Sentences which are too long will demand hard efforts from the reader to get in all the details, see through the meaning, and get the right picture that the named sentence aims to deliver.

正确示范:Sentences which are too long are hard to read. They might not deliver the meaning efficiently.

句子太短

相反,句子太短也不是一种聪明的写法。过多的短句会削弱文章的连贯性,让读者读起来断断续续不够流畅。而同时,通常来说用短句是无法表达出你复杂严谨的思考的。避免句子过短最好的诀窍是,运用并列结构,将它们组合在一起成为 20-25 的句子就可以啦。

错误示范:Short sentences are simple. Avoid mistakes. Write short sentences. They aid clarity. They are intense.

正确示范:The simplicity of short sentences helps to avoid the mistakes. Use them to deliver a clear and intense message.

句首使用重复的连词

首先用连词大多数情况是没有问题的。不过如果你的句子的开头看上去都差不多的话,读者一看就知道你的语言是“牙牙学语”的初级水平。避免毛病的最好办法就是换一种表达。比如下面例子

错误示范:The sentences were pretty similar. And that fact was obvious to the researchers. And that's why they pointed it out in their reports.

正确示范:The sentences were pretty similar. Researchers pointed out this obvious fact in their reports.

让你句子更精美的框架

渐进句

先引入主要观点,随后用细节和事例进行说明

例句:Oprah Winfrey became a show producer because she wanted to open minds, break the stereotypes, and inspire the audience with her values.

掉尾句

先用细节组织句子,主要观点最后浮出。

例句:Breaking the shop windows, marauding the stores, and setting cars on fire, the rioters caused severe damage.

平衡句

用并列结构表达2个同一层级的观点。这种方法最适合表达2个相悖的意见。

例句:A pessimist sees the difficulty in every opportunity; an optimist sees the opportunity in every difficulty. (Winston Churchill)

使用过渡词

过渡词不仅能让你写的更轻松,也能让人读起来更容易。因为过渡词通常已经解释了前后两部分之间的关系。

例句:Oprah Winfrey was nominated for Oscar for the best supporting role; however, it was her groundbreaking media accomplishments that made everyone recognize her talent.

用这些酷炫的句型开启思维

There is a hot debate over…

…引起了热烈的辩论

功能:用这个句子来介绍你的论题

例句:There is a hot debate over whether the automated driverless cars should be allowed to roam freely on the streets.

There is no doubt/denying that…

毫无疑问...

功能: 这是一个开放的句型,用来转折后描述一个现状或者事实

例句:There is no doubt that literacy is a staple skill for the modern human being.

X and Y share a common denominator...

X 和 Y有一个共同点

功能:这句话可以用来介绍某样几样的普遍特征

例句:Oprah Winfrey and Martha Stewart share a common denominator-they both have built successful media empires on their personal brand.

Further evidence supporting/against X may lie in the findings of Y, who...

A发现了更多的证据可以支持(驳斥)B,他(她).....

功能:使用这个句型来对引文进行一次精彩的介绍。

例句:Further evidence supporting the addictive character of unpacking videos for toddlers may lie in the findings of David A. Craig, who researched this phenomenon in 2017.

There is a rapidly growing literature on X, which indicates that…

关于X的文献迅速增长,这意味着......

功能:用这个句子在文中提出你重要的论点或者主题

例句:There is a rapidly growing literature on inclusive programs, which indicates the raise in teachers enthusiasm to work with the autism disorders.

With this in mind...

考虑到这点…

功能:用这个句子你可以将你的论点切换到另个知识领域

例句:We've seen that the Beat generation poets overthrew the values of the society they dwelled in. With this in mind, let's look at a Rimbaud's thrusts at the ethics of the 19th century France.

To that end...

为此...

功能:这个句子可以用来替换过多出现的so.

例句:The scientists were puzzled by the calculations behind the Mayan calendars for decades. To that end, a new computer program was developed to analyze all the massive of data the ancients had to process.

A point often overlooked...

有一个容易被忽视的观点...

功能:这句子可以帮助调动读者的注意力,用来引出你的论点

例句:Point often overlooked is that Oprah Winfrey was the first to popularize the intimate form of a talk show, adopted by all channels ever since.

Proponents of X, have also suggested that Y...

X的支持者也建议Y ...

功能:这个句子可以突出2个论点之间的联系

例句:Proponents of the unpacking videos ban, have also suggested that the screen time for the toddlers should be limited to 30 minutes a day.

From what has been discussed above, we may conclude that…

综上所述,我们可以得出结论...

功能:这是开启你总结锻炼的金句,因为重申观点在论文结尾很重要

例句:From what has been discussed above, we may conclude that the poetry of the Beat Generation was massively influenced by the French Symbolists.

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