雅思小作文解析及范文（一）

二、雅思小作文解析及范文:广播电视白天的观众数

Task：Radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992.

　　范文解读：

　　以下是6分, 7分和9分范文，可以看出，上6分的文章都有一个共性，就是没有大的语法错误，分段合适，表达清晰，且进行适当的词汇替换。而7分比6分好在如下方面：

　　1. 7分加入了对比。

　　2. 7分的句式更加的多样和灵活，而6分文章的句式单一，而且again使用过多。

　　3. 7分有足够的信号词(如however, after that等)，这能帮助考官理解文章的层次和结构。

　　4. 最后，9分范文的特点是句式多样，词汇的同义替换和词性变化十分明显，同时表达更加细节化。

　　参考范文：

　　6分范文

　　The graph shows the percentage of audiences over 4 yes old of UK follows the radio and television throughout the day during the period October-December 1992.

　　It has been observed from the graph that less than 10% audiences follows the radio at 6:00 am and the percentage raised to a peak around 30% at 8′AM and decline gradually to around 10% during the period 2′00 to 4′00 Pm and again raised a bi t to around 12% between 4′00 to 6′00 PM. It then again dropped to below 10% at around 10′PM. The rate again raised to a bit between 10′00 PM to 12′00 PM and then dropped slowly by 4′00 AM.

　　On the other hand, the rate of television audiences raises 0-10% during the period 6′00 to 8′00 am and remain steady up to 1 0′AM and then gradually goes down by 12′00 noon. The percentage raised dramatically to around 15% by 2′00 noon. The percentage raised dramatically goes down by 12′00 noon. The percentage raised dramatically to around 15% by 2′00 PM which again raised to a peak above 40% between 6′00-8′00 PM and then gradually dropped between the period 12′00 PM to 4′00 AM.

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　　7分范文

　　The graph shows the change of percentage of TV and Radio audiences over 4-years old throughout the day during the period October-December 1992.

　　Firstly, it is noticeable that the percentage of audiences was 3 percent in early morning but it gradually rose up to ten percent at 8:00 am and maintained the same for the next two hours. There was a slight fall in percentage in next two hours however after that it raised sharply unto 20 percent within the next two hours. After this the graph rose very fast and attained its peak at 10 pm which was about forty 5 percent. The graph gradually fell down and at 2:00 am it was at five percent.

　　Differently, the peak percentage of the radio audiences was at 8:00 am which was about 30 percent. Then it gradually fell and corresponded with the television one at 2 pm. After that it gradually decreased but with a small increase in percentage at 4:30 to 6:00 pm. The percentage of audience then gradually went down and at 4 am, the lowest level at near 2 percent.

　　Generally, these graphs prove the progressive popularity of television.

　　(192 words)