2015年6月13日全国大学英语考试四级 写作范文

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作文题一

参考范文

首段：

1. 描述图片(As is vividly shown in the drawing above,可直接引用图中人物原话，并添加引号。)

2. 引出内涵(It seems to me that the cartoon/drawing is sending a message that…, 引出图画目的/个人针对文章主题的观点,即，手机网络教育不能替代学校教育) 

As is vividly/graphically shown in the cartoon/drawing above, a little boy is asking his father with puzzle, “Why am I going to school if my phone already knows everything.” It seems to me that the cartoon/drawing is sending a message that the little boy has trouble fully understanding the importance of learning at schools rather than from cell phones.

中段：

原因分析（适当列举手机网络教育不能替代学校教育的原因，比如，学校教育能够培养交流，沟通，合作，互助等技能，有助于个人职业发展，这是手机网络教育无法企及哒。）

It must be noted that learning at schools, apparently, teaches us many things that we will never be able to gain from cell phones for the following reasons. First and foremost, school education will provide us with more opportunity to develop our interpersonal skills, which may put us in a favorable position in the future job markets, which is by no means achieved only by learning from cell phones. In addition, it is only by school education that we may both improve our academic studies, and gain much valuable experience by co-operating as well as communicating with others.

末段：引出结论，首尾呼应

From what has been discussed above, we may safely draw a conclusion that we cannot emphasize the importance of school education too much, which can never be replaced by cell phones.

作文题二

参考范文

首段：

1. 描述图片(As is graphically shown in the cartoon above,可适当概括描述图片内容)

2. 引出内涵(It seems to me that the cartoon/drawing is sending a message that…, 引出图画目的/个人针对文章主题的观点，即人们过度依赖电脑，电脑过度使用问题严重) 

As is graphically shown in the cartoon above, the computer has become the focus of our modern lives and the source of our happiness and contentment whenever we are and wherever we go. It seems to me that the cartoon/drawing is sending a message that we can’t live without computers.

中段：

弊端分析（适当列举多度使电脑的弊端，比如有碍于身体健康等）

Although, no one can deny a basic truth that people’s lives, over the last decades, have been dramatically changed because of computers, it must be admitted that overuse of computers may bring a lot of disadvantages as follows. First of all, it is commonly accepted that overdone is worse than undone, overuse of computers may bring about negative impacts on our physical growth because it is important for us to take some sport activities when we have already spent the whole day in the office. Furthermore, sitting in front of the computer day and night without any physical exercise may produce disastrous influence on our later life.

末段：引出结论，首尾呼应

From what has been discussed above, we may safely draw a conclusion that although our desire to access information from computers is understandable, its disadvantages far outweigh the advantages.

作文题三

Parents’ role in their children’s growth

参考范文

首段：

1. 描述图片(As is graphically shown in the cartoon above, 可直接引用图中人物原话，并添加引号。)

2. 引出内涵(It seems to me that the cartoon/drawing is sending a message that…, 引出图画目的/个人针对文章主题的观点，即我们应该过度依赖父母的建议，应该具备独立思考的能力) 

　 As is vividly/graphically depicted in the cartoon, the girl said to her mother, “Good news mom! I was accepted to the college of your choice.” It seems to me that the cartoon/drawing is sending a message that dependence on parents’ suggestions, to a certain extent, produce a negative impact on children’s growth.

中段：

原因分析 （适当列举父母的建议角色对于孩子人生规划发展方面的消极作用，比如无法激发孩子的独立性, 培养批判性思维，不利于个性发展，容易导致心理疾病等）

Many individuals, if not most, harbor the idea that following parents’ advices exert positive effect on their children’s growth. However, this opinion is now being questioned by more and more experts for the following reasons; first and foremost, it is unhealthy for children who always rely heavily on their parents because they should learn to be independent. For instance, independence may help us rise to the challenges and put us in a beneficial position in the future job markets when they grow up. Moreover, too much dependence on parents also makes it difficult to develop critical mind and cultivate their characters. They may become more solitary and even suffer from certain mental illness.

末段：引出结论，首尾呼应

From what has been discussed above, we can safely draw a conclusion that although children’s dependence on their parents is understandable, its disadvantages far outweigh the advantages.

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